12.28托福寫作範文+分析

學術寫(xie) 作分析

教授

This week's course materials will focus on scientific discoveries. While scientific researchers usuallyprefer to share what theylearn with other scientists, manybusinesses and governments keep certain scientific discoveries secret. Somepeople believe that all scientific discoveries should be shared freely among scientists all around the world and that governments and businesses should not keep any discoveriessecret. What do you believe and why?

Kelly:

I don't think all discoveries should be shared. Businesses. for example, often spend a lot of money on scientific research in order to make a discovery that can lead to profit. Even if that discovery benefits everyone, the business has a right to keep the discovery secret so that it can develop a profitable product from the research.

Paul:

Sharing knowledge is crucially important to most scientists. Scientists usually publish the details of their discoveries in scientific journals, which means that everyone can see what the scientists have accomplished. Being recognized as the person who made a discovery is the biggest reward for any scientist. When scientists keep their discoveries secret, they lose that recognition. That is very unsatisfying.

審題分析

(1). 這道題重複了23年10月22日題目。是一道橫跨多年的題目。

第1次老師推送此題的分析時，用的還是SARS的例子。第2次推送的時候，用的是COVID-19/Novel coronavirus新冠病毒。萬(wan) 萬(wan) 沒想到，第3次推送的時候，新冠還沒結束！第4次推送的時候，終於(yu) 一切都結束了!

今天是第5次推送，不僅(jin) 一切都結束，而且疫情好像已經從(cong) 記憶中抹去了一樣。人，果然是善忘。

(2). 這個(ge) 題目的問題是：

教授：本周的課程資料將集中討論科學發現。雖然科學研究人員通常更願意與(yu) 其他科學家分享他們(men) 的學習(xi) 成果，但許多企業(ye) 和政府卻將某些科學發現保密。有人認為(wei) ，所有的科學發現都應該在全球範圍內(nei) 的科學家之間自由分享，政府和企業(ye) 不應該保留任何秘密。你持什麽(me) 觀點，為(wei) 什麽(me) ？

需要我們(men) 發表觀點的是：Somepeople believe that all scientific discoveriesshould be shared freely among scientists allaround the world and that governments andbusinesses should not keep any discoveriessecret.

(3). 審題注意點：

1. All scientific discoveries:絕對，可以反駁，提出哪些發現不能分享。比如：軍(jun) 事核武器... 如果被恐怖分子等利用，整個(ge) 世界的和平就會(hui) 受到威脅。

需要分享的理由是：

① 加速科研的進步。比如新冠時期，很多科研發現都是第一時間在全世界內(nei) 分享，加速了疫苗的研發和推廣，拯救了全球數百萬(wan) 人的生命。

② 科學家們(men) 需要認可（=Paul）。

2. “governments and businesses should not keep any discoveries secret.”-

題目會(hui) 涉及到政府和公司主要因為(wei) ：很多大公司都雇傭(yong) 了世界上最頂尖的科學家來做研發產(chan) 品。所以他們(men) 會(hui) 掌握很多最先進的發明。比如Tsela 的電池。Google 的搜索。Apple 也掌握很多專(zhuan) 利...或者國家也資助了很多科學家們(men) 的實驗...

他們(men) 想保密的原因是：盈利；有資金再次投入到未來的科研，因為(wei) 科研需要大筆資金。(=Kelly的觀點)

對於(yu) 這2個(ge) 兩(liang) 難的困境，大家可以聯係之前大火的電影《我不是藥神》。

參考範文:

I align myself with Paul's perspective that scientific discoveries should be freely shared.The primary reason for my stance is the collective benefit to humanity that comes from open dissemination of scientific knowledge.

站隊+總觀點+分論點

For instance,consider the field of medical science, wheredeadly or highly contagiousdiseases like HIV, cancer, and COVID-19 are exceptionally complex and challenging.A lone scientist or a closed group cannot conquer these issues; international collaboration is essential.In recent years, we'vewitnessedthe positive impact of such openness: the rapid development and distribution of COVID-19 vaccines. Thanks to unselfish international collaboration, millions of vulnerable lives were saved.

舉(ju) 例展開

WhileI acknowledge the concerns of businesses and governments who invest heavily in research and expect significant returns,I argue that the value of human lives saved or improved by scientific breakthroughs should be the ultimate priority.Therefore, I firmly believe that all scientific discoveries should be freely shared among the global scientific community.

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