劍橋雅思寫作7分範文及解析：Test3 提高公共健康的方式

雙邊類大作文，健康類話題

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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1、題目大意

有些人認為(wei) 改善公眾(zhong) 健康的最佳方式是增加體(ti) 育設施的數量。但也有人認為(wei) 這對公眾(zhong) 健康影響不大，需要采取其他措施。討論雙方觀點並給出你自己的看法

2、思路解析

這是一道雙邊討論的題目，聊的是改善公眾(zhong) 健康的方法。雙邊類的題目，需要對每個(ge) 觀點分別表達同意或反對，最終的結論就是我的立場，可以是中立（雙方都同意或都反對），也可以是單邊支持某一方立場。審題時要注意兩(liang) 點，一是絕對詞“the best way”，一般遇到絕對詞我們(men) 從(cong) 反對角度更容易切入。二是題目討論對象“public health”的範圍其實很廣，除了運動外，還有很多影響因素，比如生活壓力、空氣和水資源是否幹淨、食物衛生等等會(hui) 產(chan) 生印影響。下麵，月半鴨和大家一起來看下具體(ti) 觀點。

首先來看前者觀點的合理性。

更多的體(ti) 育設施確實意味著人們(men) 有更多的鍛煉場所和鍛煉機會(hui) ，這對他們(men) 的身體(ti) 健康有好處。許多人們(men) 喜歡的體(ti) 育項目比如羽毛球、籃球、足球、遊泳等往往需要專(zhuan) 門的場地才能進行這些運動，隻有提供了相應設施，人們(men) 才有機會(hui) 進行這些運動鍛煉身體(ti) 。同時，更多的鍛煉場所也能減少人們(men) 前往的路程和時間，一定程度上提高人們(men) 的積極度。

但是，增加體(ti) 育設施並不能解決(jue) 所有問題。一方麵，許多人不運動可能是由於(yu) 生活壓力太大，將大量精力和時間用於(yu) 工作或學習(xi) ，而無法進行運動。另一種可能是，一些人對健康缺乏重視程度，過於(yu) 懶惰從(cong) 而不進行運動。針對這兩(liang) 種情況，政府可以出台更多措施來促進人們(men) 工作和生活之間的平衡，以及加大宣傳(chuan) 和采用更多鼓勵措施，來提高人們(men) 對健康運動的重視程度和積極性。

而從(cong) 後者觀點來看，公共健康確實還有其它問題需要對應措施解決(jue) 。（這邊可以任意挑一點或兩(liang) 點展開）

一是環境汙染會(hui) 嚴(yan) 重影響人們(men) 的身體(ti) 健康，而政府可以出台嚴(yan) 格的規章來禁止企業(ye) 進行汙水和廢氣排放造成環境汙染，或是增加綠植麵積起到淨化空氣的作用，以及可以投入研究更多清潔能源來替代現有的煤炭和石油進而減少汙染。

二是食品問題也會(hui) 對人們(men) 健康造成威脅，對於(yu) 高糖高油等不健康的食物，需要提醒人們(men) 盡可能減少食用。而對於(yu) 在食物中添加有害物質或衛生條件不達標的情況，需要政府製定規則明令禁止，並對違法者做出處罰，盡可能杜絕此類現象。

三是現有的疾病和未知的病毒會(hui) 威脅到人們(men) 健康，因此需要投入更多資源在醫學研究、醫療設施建設以及專(zhuan) 業(ye) 人員的培養(yang) ，來保證更多人可以得到及時的救助以及應對潛在的威脅。

3、提綱

劍9寫(xie) 作7分範文及解析 | Test3 提高公共健康的方式

4、高分範文示例

I strongly believe that the increase of the quantity of sports infrastructures does little with the proliferation of the standard of physical wellbeings, and other schemes are highly recommended for realizing this purpose.

Those myopically suggesting that enlarged number of facilities would contribute to a better outcome of the public health hold misconceptions to the essence of the problem in the first place. They may, on the one hand, simply consider that the lowered standard of the physical situations among today’s citizens is mainly sourced from the lack of daily excercises. Individuals typically take less movements when the increasing private transport, intelligence-based occupations and powerful logistic system are gradually leading to people fostering a lazier living, during which they are no longer forced to make moderate amount of physical activities. More infrastructures, sports centers should be established, ergo, to give them chances in getting access to their daily exercises. Whereas they may neglect the fact that people lack the chances of doing sports simply due to their indolence, or their occupational property which gives them no enough time to fulfill their related needs but not sourced from the limited quantity of exercise locations of tools. Besides, the amount of exercise is also not the solely determing factor influencing the public health. Poor hygiene in the remote places, famine in the desolated areas, pollutions and high level of living pressures in the urban centers, or even smoking habits or the disorder of one’s sleep schedule are all the key elements provoking negative health conditions, which are not supposed to be alleviated solely by developing sports infrastructures in terms of the quantity and coverage.

Therefore, core of public health problems must be seriously considered in a correct way. Policy makers, physicians, together with the related experts should look at the world from a macro perspective, under which the focuses are supposed to be accumulated into solving the aforementioned elements, turning the attention from increasing the sports facilities into matters like how to alleviate the burden of the blighted environment, or how to foster the more regular public living arrangement. Money, which would be to no avail if poured into proliferating the sports-related services, would be valued more when invested for dealing with the polluted rivers, smogged air, as well as the diminishing green areas. Water purification and clean energy development, accompanied by the afforesation in both the cities and alongside farming lands, hence, are definitely more practical for public health improvement. What is more, reasonable quantity of propagandas on the harms of disordered routines in arising awarenesses of the significance of sound living habits also generates greater benefits than solely providing the sports infrastructures, since it concentrates more on the essence of elements plaguing the physical conditions and contributes to the direct positive effects to majority wellbeing.

In conclusion, the nature of the issue on promoting public health should be recognised distinctly through reasoning the elements contributing to this, and solutions available should focus more on the weakening points and rooted factors but not the superficial phenomenons.

5、相關(guan) 詞匯和語法結構

Proliferation 激增、增生、擴散

Myopically 缺乏遠見、近視的

Misconception 錯誤概念、誤解

Infrastructure 基礎設施

Indolence 懶惰、懶散

Hygiene 衛生

Famine 饑荒

Desolate 荒涼的、淒涼

Provoke 激起、引起、引發

Alleviate 減輕、緩和

Solely 單獨的、唯一的