雅思大作文7分範文及解析：延長刑期減少犯罪

雙邊類大作文，犯罪類話題

Some people think the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, think there are better alternative ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

題目來源：2019年3月14日亞(ya) 太雅思大作文

1、題目大意

有人認為(wei) 減少犯罪最好的方式是延長坐牢的時間。而另一些人認為(wei) 其他方法會(hui) 更好。討論雙方觀點，並給出自己的看法

2、思路解析

這是一道雙邊類大作文，聊的是減少犯罪的方法。雙邊類的題目，需要對每個(ge) 觀點分別表達同意或反對，最終的結論就是我的立場，可以是中立（雙方都同意或都反對），也可以是單邊支持某一方立場。審題時注意兩(liang) 點，一是題目中出現絕對詞“the best way”，一般遇到絕對化的觀點都是從(cong) 反對角度切入更好寫(xie) 。二是題目觀點限定“reduce crime”，因此論證過程中需要圍繞這點展開。下麵月半鴨和大家一起來看下具體(ti) 觀點~

首先來看前者觀點的合理性。

延長坐牢時間意味著更重的懲罰，能夠加大犯罪成本，對於(yu) 那些潛在的或已經犯罪的罪犯是一種威懾，減少他們(men) 初犯或者再犯的可能性。

但是，這個(ge) 方法並不能稱為(wei) 最好的，因為(wei) 其存在許多問題。

一是單純加大懲罰並沒有從(cong) 根本上解決(jue) 犯罪的原因，比如有些人犯罪可能是因為(wei) 生計所迫不得不犯罪，加大處罰並不能解決(jue) 他們(men) 如何正常生活的問題

二是延長刑期意味著罪犯與(yu) 社會(hui) 脫節的時間會(hui) 進一步加大，當他們(men) 出獄後想要繼續融入社會(hui) 的難度會(hui) 進一步增加，如果無法回歸正常生活並維持生計，他們(men) 可能會(hui) 再次犯罪。

三是延長刑期意味著政府需要投入更高的管理成本，加重政府的財政負擔，可能導致政府在其他關(guan) 於(yu) 公眾(zhong) 安全的領域投入不足，比如警察局的相關(guan) 預算，進而導致犯罪率難以下降。

然後來看其他可行辦法。

一是加強教育，特別是對於(yu) 青少年，通過教育提高人們(men) 法律意識和是非觀念，降低違法犯罪的可能性。

二是改善經濟情況並提供更多就業(ye) 機會(hui) ，當人們(men) 能夠有合法手段來獲得收入時，違法犯罪的意願也會(hui) 降低。

三是為(wei) 已經入獄的罪犯提供更多教育和職業(ye) 技能培訓，同時通過宣傳(chuan) 減少人們(men) 對於(yu) 獲釋人員的歧視，使得他們(men) 在出獄能夠找到合適的工作並融入社會(hui) ，減少再犯的幾率。

3、提綱

4、高分範文示例

Sadly, there is widespread agreement that “crime is an ever-present condition, even as sickness, disease, and death.”  This universally high proportion of people proven to be involved in felonies necessitates the policy of mass incarceration.  However, the severity of the punishment never effectively deters criminals.  Instead, I believe that tackling the root causes of crime is a better way to go about reducing crime.

Increasingly punitive sentences add little to the deterrent effect of the criminal justice system.  There exists strong criminological evidence that lengthy prison terms are counterproductive for public safety as they result in the incarceration of individuals long past the time that they have aged out of the high crime years.  In most cases, the rates of crime involvement begin declining sharply by a person’s early to mid-twenties and continue on a downward trajectory.  These dynamics challenges the significant meaning of the length and effectiveness of prison terms. Besides, Mass incarceration is also fiscally unsustainable in that as the prison system is expanding, it diverts resources from program and policy initiatives that hold potential for greater impact on public safety.

In the effort to combat crime rate, it would be better and more effective to adopt prevention initiatives to address these root causes.  Although crimes can vary in their typology and methods of execution, most crimes are the result of certain risk factors, such as poverty, unemployment or other less obvious causal factors like the influence of violence in family or movies.  Research studies indicate that intervening early in one’s life diminishes the likelihood of embarking on or persisting in a criminal career.  For those convicted, assigning social workers to teach them useful living and social skills or sometimes simply enhancing the economic reality are proven effective to rehabilitate the offenders and deter them from repeat offences.

In conclusion, the effect of threats of the long period of imprisonment seems to be moderate. Prioritizing interventions of an early age and skills and economic development would largely affect potential deterrent and rehabilitative goals.

5、相關(guan) 詞匯和語法結構

Felony   重罪

Necessitate   使成為(wei) 必要

Incarceration   監禁、下獄、禁閉

Criminological   刑事學的，犯罪學的

Trajectory   彈道、軌跡

Initiative   倡議、積極性、主動性

rehabilitate   改造、修複