雅思大作文7分範文及解析：年輕人休閑時間隻購物

利弊類大作文，社會(hui) 類話題

Young people spend their leisure time shopping rather than doing sports or listening to music. Do you think it is positive or negative development?

題目來源：2022年11月6日大陸機考雅思大作文

* 這道題目是11月6日機考的學生回憶出的，之前未在紙筆場次中出現，但雅思機考和紙筆的寫(xie) 作題庫其實是一致的，所以紙筆的考題一定會(hui) 在機考出現，機考的題目也會(hui) 在紙筆場次出現。

1、題目大意

年輕人把他們(men) 的休閑時間花在購物上，而不是做運動或聽音樂(le) 。你認為(wei) 這是積極還是消極的發展？

2、思路解析

這是一道利弊類大作文，聊的是年輕人休閑時購物而非做運動等的利弊，和之前情報圈發過的另一道題目類似，想要查看那篇範文&解析的同學，可以點擊鏈接：雅思大作文7分範文及解析：年輕人經常逛商場好不好

利弊類文章需要強調在論證上體(ti) 現合理性，即在具體(ti) 的分析中，明確能體(ti) 現出一邊的論述的確是大於(yu) 另一邊，或是利弊均等，而利弊是否有說服力並不取決(jue) 於(yu) 觀點的數量，而是內(nei) 容是否有說服力。審題時需要注意兩(liang) 點，首先是限定對象“young people”，要考慮到年輕人的特性。其次是觀點中包含比較關(guan) 係“shopping”和“doing sports or listening to music”，因此在論證利弊時需要考慮兩(liang) 方。下麵，月半鴨和大家一起來看下具體(ti) 觀點。

首先來看好處，有兩(liang) 方麵。

一是許多年輕人願意購物可以推動經濟發展，其產(chan) 生的消費需求能夠促使商家生產(chan) 更多商品，進而創造出更多工作崗位，國家也能在交易過程中收取更多賦稅。相比較而言，做體(ti) 育運動或聽音樂(le) 很難產(chan) 生同樣的經濟消費。

二是對於(yu) 年輕人來說，有權利自己選擇休閑時間做什麽(me) ，隻要能夠讓人覺得心情愉悅和放鬆，無論是購物還是鍛煉或其他項目，都是可行的。

再來看壞處，同樣有兩(liang) 方麵。

一方麵，體(ti) 育運動或聽音樂(le) 相較於(yu) 購物更有助於(yu) 年輕人的身心健康。經常參加運動能讓人擁有更好的體(ti) 格，聽音樂(le) 則有助於(yu) 年輕人擁有更好的精神狀態，這些好處是逛街購物很難獲得的，而良好的身體(ti) 和精神狀態，對於(yu) 年輕人的未來生活和工作都會(hui) 有益。

另一方麵，將所有時間用於(yu) 購物，會(hui) 造成非常大的經濟壓力。年輕人往往工作收入不高，甚至有些還未開始工作，在這種情況下，高額的支出無疑會(hui) 讓他們(men) 生活變得困頓甚至給父母造成壓力。

3、提綱

4、高分範文示例

It is a fact that the younger individuals of this age prefer to spend their leisure time in shopping malls rather than getting involved in activities such as sports or musical groups. Due to the explanations provided in the following paragraphs, I believe this is an unpleasant trend.

For one, encouraging adolescents to take part in extracurricular activities like sports and the arts is a great way to promote their overall health. The arts and music energise the mind, while physical exercise builds strength. For instance, the students who participate in athletics maintain a better physique than their peers, who frequently shop around. A recent World Health Organization study found that young people who do not engage in either athletics or the arts are more likely to suffer from depression. Thus, music and athletics promote the well-being of adolescents.

For another, youth who participate in organised group activities like sports or music show markedly greater levels of creativity. Thus, as musicians and athletes, they become productive members of the community. However, the youthful population that frequents shopping malls has little positive to give to their own communities. Instead, they may progressively become a burden on society if they engage in illegal actions. Teenagers who congregate in shopping malls and other public places, for instance, may be susceptible to recruitment by a local criminal gang if they lack a mature mindset and adequate education. Therefore, the arts and sports aid adolescents in maintaining their focus throughout their lives.

In conclusion, I am a firm believer that children's physical and mental health, as well as their creativity, are benefited by participation in sports and the arts.

5、相關(guan) 詞匯和語法結構

extracurricular activity   課外活動

shop around   貨比三家後購買(mai)

engage in   參加，從(cong) 事於(yu)

a burden on   對……是負擔