劍11寫作7分範文及解析：Test5 商業、科研和學術中的信息共享

雙邊類大作文，科技類話題

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

題目來源：劍12Test5大作文

1、題目大意

一些人認為(wei) ，在科學研究、商業(ye) 和學術界盡可能多地分享信息是好事。其他人認為(wei) ，有些信息太重要或太寶貴，無法自由分享。討論這兩(liang) 種觀點並給出自己的看法。

2、思路解析

這是一道雙邊類大作文，討論的是信息是否應該共享的問題。雙邊類大作文，需要對每個(ge) 觀點分別表達同意或反對，最終的結論就是我的立場，可以是中立（雙方都同意或都反對），也可以是單邊支持某一方立場。審題時注意兩(liang) 點，一是題目討論範圍“scientific research, business and the academic world”，在論證時需要提及相關(guan) 內(nei) 容。二是觀點中“as much as possible”和“freely”兩(liang) 種表述，需要進行討論。下麵，月半鴨和大家一起看下具體(ti) 觀點。

首先來看前者觀點的合理性，可以各方麵分開考慮。

在商業(ye) 領域共享信息可以增加透明度，減少商業(ye) 欺詐和其他非法活動的可能性，進而增加商業(ye) 夥(huo) 伴或者顧客和商家之間的信任度。

在科學領域和學術領域，信息共享能夠促進人員相互之間的學習(xi) 和交流，減少不必要的重複工作，並有助於(yu) 產(chan) 生具有創造性的新理論。

再來看後者觀點的合理性。

商業(ye) 角度來說，信息共享可能降低企業(ye) 的核心競爭(zheng) 力，比如食品行業(ye) 的核心配方就是一家企業(ye) 盈利的關(guan) 鍵，一旦被同行知曉，企業(ye) 利益會(hui) 受到巨大損失。

科學領域中，一些科學研究成果可能關(guan) 係到國家的競爭(zheng) 力和安全問題。比如核武器的機密一旦公布，很可能會(hui) 被恐怖組織利用並威脅到平民的安全。

學術領域中，如果學術產(chan) 出可以被免費分享，那學者的知識產(chan) 權將不複存在，他們(men) 也很難從(cong) 中獲益，進而可能損害學術研究的積極性。

3、提綱

4、高分範文示例

People have different views about whether information sharing on the areas of scientific research, business and academic should be maximised. While such information sharing can sometimes be beneficial, I believe there should be a boundary of sharing.

On the one hand, information sharing maximisation among these three sectors could achieve the purpose of mutual benefits. Firstly, in the field of scientific research, it could provide diverse perspectives for researchers, which contributes to a comprehensive analysis for the scientific phenomenon. Secondly, in the area of business, information sharing could improve customer loyalty because it creates a relatively transparent environment between companies and customers. For example, in food industry, if the information about the ingredients and productive process is provided, it could enhance the brand credibility which attracts customers. Finally, in terms of academic, information sharing could generate creative theories. It provides scholars various angles of existing theses which enables them to develop.

On the other hand, unrestricted information sharing could lead to severe negative consequences. To begin with, free access on scientific research may penetrate national security because the sensitive information could be taken advantage of. If the government research on weaponry technologies could be viewed freely, it may draw attention from terrorist group which will cause a disaster. After that, for the business world, such information sharing could lead to a vicious competition. Take food industry as an example, others may detect the core recipe and duplicate the product. With regard to the academic field, if the information is accessible, intellectual property may not be recognised. In this respect, plagiarism emerges where there is no respect on original scholars. It can therefore be argued there should be a boundary of sharing information. Some sensitive and valuable information may need to be kept strictly confidential.

In conclusion, I can understand why people might want open information among the areas of scientific research, business and academic, but it seems to me that certain information with sensitive and valuable nature cannot be accessed liberally.

5、相關(guan) 詞匯和語法結構

Maximisation   最大化

Mutual   相互的 ; 彼此的 ; 共有的

Comprehensive   綜合的 ; 全部的

Transparent   透明的 ; 清澈的

Ingredients   成分 ; 原料

Credibility   可靠性 ;可信性

Penetrate   穿透 ; 穿過 ; 進入

Vicious   惡毒的 ; 狂暴的 ; 殘酷的

Duplicate   複製 ; 重複

Confidential   保密的 ; 機密的