2023年雅思寫作外教範文：你會寫線圖小作文嗎？

今天，給大家帶來一個(ge) IELTS雅思城鎮規劃類小作文的原創範文。

題目：

- Model Answer 高分範文 -

The line graph shows the midyear populations of China, India, and the USA, measured in millions, from 1950 to the year 2000.

Overall, all three countries witnessed an increase in their populations, with China and India both increasing at nearly the same rate; whereas, America’s population growth rate was much more subdued and was far less than the other two nations.

In 1950, China’s population stood at approximately 580 million and India’s 200 million less, (1)a variance that rose only slightly to 250 million by the end of the whole period. Likewise, the United States also had roughly the same difference with India in 2000 as at the beginning of the period, but whose population number only increased slowly throughout the fifty years.

The only significant deviation from the parallel trend of China and India was between the years 1959 to about 1963, when China registered a brief period of stagnant population growth, standing at 650 million for those four years, which thereafter, resumed climbing.

Conversely, the United States saw an extremely gradual yet consistent increase to just below the 300 million mark, (2)almost a full billion fewer people than China by the turn of the century.

- Essay Analysis 範文解析 -

Standard Task 1 Phrases 雅思小作文地道表達積累：

• The line graph shows 該線圖展示了
• measured in 以……為單位
• the year 2000
• Overall, 總體來說
• witnessed an increase 見證了增長
• increasing at near enough 大約增長了
• far less than 比……少得多
• stood at approximately 大約處於
• rose only slightly to 輕微增長
• by the end of the whole period 整個期間的末期
• increased slowly 緩慢增長
• parallel trend of 平行的趨勢
• was between the years
• registered a brief period of 短時間
• standing at 處於
• resumed climbing 恢複增長
• saw an 見證了
• gradual 逐漸的
• consistent increase to 持續增長
• below the ___ mark 低於……
• at the turn of the century 在世紀之交

Vocabulary 高分地道詞匯:

• growth rate 增長率
• subdued 低緩的
• variance 差異
• significant 顯著的
• deviation 偏差
• registered 展示出
• stagnant 停滯的
• resumed 繼續；恢複
• extremely 極其；非常
• mark (point) 標記

Cohesion (C&C words and phrases) 把這些簡單的詞用好，在"連貫與(yu) 銜接"方麵輕鬆拿分：

• from + year + to
• Overall,
• their
• , with
• same
• ; whereas,
• much more
• far less than
• the other two
• and
• less
• that
• only
• by the end of the whole period
• Likewise,
• also
• roughly
• , but which only
• , when
• , standing at
• those
• , which thereafter,
• Conversely,
• yet
• just
• , almost
• than

- Items to note -

(1) By following a noun or adjective with a comma and then ‘a’ (an), it allows us to further identify the noun. This is a common technique, called an ‘appositive phrase’ (同位語), that can also be used in Task 2, especially in the introduction for an opinion essay, where we can identify the topic as: ‘, a viewpoint I agree with...’

(2) Same as point one, but with the adverb ‘almost’ placed before the ‘a’.