劍橋雅思真題集17寫作範文解析：孩子花大量時間玩手機利弊分析

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混合類大作文，教育類話題

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphoness. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

題目來源：劍17Test2大作文

題目大意

有些孩子每天花幾個(ge) 小時在智能手機，原因是什麽(me) ？你認為(wei) 這是一個(ge) 積極的還是消極的發展？

思路解析

這是一道報告類大作文，聊的是兒(er) 童使用智能手機的問題。報告類的題目結構比較簡單，兩(liang) 個(ge) 主體(ti) 段分別對應兩(liang) 個(ge) 問題，主體(ti) 段一討論原因，主體(ti) 段二討論利弊。文章理解上不難，審題時注意討論的限定對象“children”和“smartphoness”，不要歪了，比如有學生可能討論到TV等等。下麵月半鴨和大家一起來看下具體(ti) 觀點。

首先來看“孩子花幾個(ge) 小時在手機上”的原因，主要有兩(liang) 方麵。

一是智能手機在當今社會(hui) 非常普遍，這一代孩子們(men) 從(cong) 出生開始就能接觸到。作為(wei) 數字原住民，這些孩子在成長過程中已經習(xi) 慣於(yu) 用手機學習(xi) 、玩遊戲甚至與(yu) 他人交流，因此他們(men) 在手機上需要花費許多時間來完成這些事項。

二是孩子的父母可能忙於(yu) 工作沒有時間陪伴孩子，因此會(hui) 讓孩子去用手機玩遊戲或看動畫片進而避免打擾自己。而這些遊戲往往容易讓人上癮，如果孩子缺少家長的監督，可能會(hui) 花大量的時間沉迷其中。

然後來看利弊討論。

好處在於(yu) ，孩子能更熟練掌握如何使用手機並且這會(hui) 讓他們(men) 未來生活更加便利。在現代社會(hui) ，手機確實已經成為(wei) 一個(ge) 非常重要的生活工具，無論是獲取信息、與(yu) 人交流還是完成各項事務都需要使用手機，因此對手機熟練運用是必不可少的。

壞處則有兩(liang) 個(ge) 。一是長時間使用手機會(hui) 對孩子的身體(ti) 健康造成負麵影響。孩子尚且處在身體(ti) 發育的過程中，一直盯著手機屏幕會(hui) 造成孩子視力下降，而長時間坐著玩手機不運動也容易引發兒(er) 童肥胖等健康問題。二是孩子花大量時間沉迷手機會(hui) 導致他們(men) 花在學習(xi) 、交友及身邊事物的時間變少，並且難以集中精力完成學業(ye) ，這對於(yu) 他們(men) 的升學和未來成長都是非常不利的。

提綱

高分範文示例

In modern society, it is not surprising to see children using smartphoness for hours a day. For better or worse, this trend has already begun to affect them in certain aspects of life.

The causes of this trend are manifold. One possible assumption is that the absence of parental company leads to children’s excessive use of smartphoness. This is because parents who are occupied with heavy workloads are likely to leave their kids with video games or cartoon series on their smartphoness to kill time. As a result, attracted by such addictive forms of entertainment, these immature minds who lack self-discipline and parents’ guardianship tend to become addicted to the virtual world. Another reason might be that today’s younger generation grow up with digital devices, and these digital-natives get used to the routine in which smartphoness are utilized to  socialize with friends, get access to updated information, or complete assignments . These activities undoubtedly prolong the time they spend on smartphoness.

Though the use of smartphoness is conducive to developing children’s digital literacy and preparing them to be technologically savvy, I believe that it is detrimental to their overall development. For one thing, the excessive exposure to digital devices would disrupt children’s physical health. The prolonged screen time, together with a sedentary lifestyle, not only damages their eyesight, but also increases the risk of developing chronic conditions such as obesity, diabetes and hypertension. For another, once kids are drawn to smart devices, they will find it hard to focus on other things around them and will be unable to concentrate on schoolwork or family life. In the long term, this unhealthy lifestyle will pose a threat to their academic performance and family relationships.

Overall, this trend might stem from a variety of causes, and it should be a negative one as it is harmful to children both physically and mentally.

相關(guan) 詞匯和語法結構

the absence of parents’ company  父母陪伴的缺失

be occupied with  忙於(yu)

dependent on sth  依賴

self-discipline  自律能力

guardianship  監護

digital literacy  數字素養(yang)