AP語言Question 3作文範文賞析

客觀說Q2 Rhetorial analysis才是最難寫(xie) 到1/4/1的作文——CB每年公布的essay mean score也幾乎一直是Q2分在考生中最低。不過近期有越來越多的聲音反饋Q3更難

我想原因之一是除了做TPO/SAT閱讀題目外，太多中國學生沒有閱讀和思考習(xi) 慣。以至於(yu) 有些人先自廢武功和淪落到看和背【假閱卷人朱諾】整理的那些老掉牙的名人故事

以上朱諾上課提到的截圖資料就是給我，我也不屑看——不僅(jin) 因為(wei) 這些資料是疑似托福80分的老師東(dong) 拚西湊的，以至於(yu) 漏洞百出，更是因為(wei) 沒有高質量的英文議論文寫(xie) 作是以背素材為(wei) 前提寫(xie) 出的，高水準的寫(xie) 作能力也從(cong) 不是這麽(me) 機械化生產(chan) 出來的。

若想不通，在freshmen year寫(xie) 第一篇long-ish essay就明白了

AP語言Question 3的底層邏輯為(wei) 何？

它考查的是學生是否能在至少一年的語言課學習(xi) 中，提高閱曆和思維能力，做到在考試那大約40分鍾時間內(nei) ，能夠麵對一個(ge) 陌生話題，旁征博引地引入論據和做論述

其實2022年的考生，比2019年的考試要幸福很多。如果你善於(yu) 觀察生活和用腦子思考問題，BLM/Covid impact這兩(liang) 個(ge) "素材" 幾乎可以通吃

請看以下2021 Q3題目 "Value of Striving for Perfection"

你要是寫(xie) Thomas Edison也可，官網也有樣本用這個(ge) 例子，一篇文章一個(ge) cliche例子也無妨。不過明年上大一，想考到Lang 5分和申請前30學校的人，和學前兒(er) 童在認知層麵是不是該有更突出的區別？

以下兩(liang) 個(ge) 主體(ti) 段源於(yu) 我下午隨手40分鍾寫(xie) 出的2021 Q3範文，沒有但也不用proofread

粗體(ti) = specific, approprirate evidence

黃色高亮 = cogi reference

style = vivid and persuasive as always

However, not every endeavor in life is a contest, and on matters more germane to everyday life, the value of striving for perfection is much more open to doubt. COVID has shone a light on this to a remarkable degree. Given the transmissibility of the virus and its ever mutating tendency, measures that were largely successful at containing the Wuhan strain can no longer be deployed to contain Omicron—at least not without incurring huge social and economic costs. China is a case in point: despite relatively small case numbers and zero Omicron-induced fatality so far, heavy-handed measures have been rolled out in recent weeks by the central government to curb the spread of infections.

In Shanghai, China’s biggest commercial hub, residents are being welded to their apartments for weeks on end as all services, including ride-hailing, grind to a halt. Ostensibly to contain the virus in service of the country’s vaunted “dynamic zero covid” policy, these measures have produced fatalities in other ways, such as when hospitals refused treatment of non-covid patients needing critical treatment. The latest outrage came as a pet corgi, whose owner was put to quarantine, was beaten to death by anonymous, baton-wielding workers in hazmat suits. 

It seems that, by defining the acceptable number of covid cases as precisly zero, rather than reconciling the epidemiological aspect of the disease with social and economic realities, the value of China’s achievement of “zero covid” is negative in the final analysis. 

Another aspect in which achieving perfection is counterproductive concerns ideological purity. Twentieth century history offers plenty of proof.

In the early days of the Soviet Union, for example, Stalin sought to establish a socialist utopia in which everyone had equal amount of everything. Attempts to erase economic inequality, however, ended in political and moral catastrophe. In the dekulakization campaign of the 1920s, forced confiscation of rich farmers’ crops produced the deaths of six million Ukrainian farmers as resentment against the well-to-do was dressed up as a moral virtue.

In seeking to realize the perfect socialist state, Stalin unleashed a system of tyranny that no capitalist form of exploitation could rival in cruelty.

As if this isn’t evidence enough, look no further than Hitler’s pursuit of racial purity by wars of conquest, and Maoist China’s obsession with eliminating class enemies and heterodox thought by way of the “Cultural Revolution.”

Whenever human beings strive to create the perfect system of thought or of running the economy, disaster is on the cards. The road to hell, it seems, is indeed paved with good intentions.

背素材的考生，提供名人事跡素材給學生背的老師，你們(men) 打算背到什麽(me) 時候？等成為(wei) XXX書(shu) 記，麵對外媒記者提問，拿著稿子念嗎？

考前最後5周，如果你托福115+/SAT閱讀語法750+，現在開始認真學也能拿5分，隻需要正確的指點和反饋

備考材料也很重要——不過隻有在高手手裏才會(hui) 奏效。不然，坐擁號稱上萬(wan) 字的模版句，朱諾老師為(wei) 何上課從(cong) 不現寫(xie) 哪怕一句英文呢？