JHU優秀文書盤點：被招生官認可的文書有什麽共性？

JHU盤點優(you) 秀文書(shu)

隨著今年機構文書(shu) 工作坊和文書(shu) 一日營陸續圓滿收官，大家有沒有刷新對申請文書(shu) 的認知，開始思考起如何寫(xie) 出獨特的文書(shu) ，打動大學呢？

最近約翰霍普金斯大學(JHU)公布了6篇優(you) 秀申請文書(shu) ，並附上了招生官點評。21Fall申請季中，機構的Mavis老師曾在ED申請中斬獲JHU的offer，老師在她的錄取分享中也真誠地呈現了她寫(xie) 文書(shu) 時的心路曆程，以及她對文書(shu) 的理解，千萬(wan) 不能錯過哦！

這六篇優(you) 秀文書(shu) 裏展現的哪些特質吸引了招生官？我們(men) 在閱讀過後找出了一些線索供大家參考：

1. 應對挑戰時的成長和反思

2. 對興(xing) 趣愛好的熱情和追求

3. 解決(jue) 問題的能力和戰略性、創新性思維

4. 幫助身邊的人、為(wei) 社區貢獻一份力量的熱心

5. 欣賞他人、團隊合作的意識

6. 對世界強烈的好奇心

The Art of Imperfection

BY STELLA

Admissions Committee Comments

In this essay, Stella dives into her journey in the art world and the challenges that came with it. She highlights the joy she found in painting at a young age and the ways this relationship evolved as she grew. Stella shows us how accepting imperfections and being patient allowed her to embrace her craft. She applies these lessons to different settings with new challenges. Her ability to recognize obstacles as opportunities for growth will serve her well at Hopkins, where she will be surrounded by new peers and opportunities and continue to learn in dynamic ways.

Stella在這篇文書(shu) 中沉浸式回憶了自己在藝術領域的探索曆程和遇到的挑戰，著重描述自己從(cong) 幼年起對繪畫的熱愛以及在成長過程中她與(yu) 繪畫的關(guan) 係是如何演變的。Stella的文書(shu) 向我們(men) 呈現了學會(hui) 接受不完美和學會(hui) 耐心是如何讓她逐漸適應創作中的挫折，擁抱看似“不完美”的作品，而她也成功將這種經驗運用到了不同場景下遇到的不同挑戰中。Stella將阻礙視作成長機會(hui) 的能力將在她進入JHU之後助她一臂之力。在JHU，她會(hui) 遇到新的夥(huo) 伴和新的機遇，繼續活力滿滿地學習(xi) 下去。

Finding Purpose in Trivial Projects

BY ANJALI

Admissions Committee Comments

Anjali uses her essay to share her experiences with making miniatures. She builds a miniature model of the house she moves into and begins to see the world with greater attention to detail. We see how this passion influences everything she does. Anjali reflects on the joy and patience she developed from making dioramas. This introspection helps the admissions committee see the strategic way she approaches problems and her resilience in the face of challenges. We get a strong sense she will feel at home on our Homewood campus, where our students create solutions using multiple perspectives.

Anjali 在文書(shu) 中分享了她製作微縮模型的經曆。在製作自己新家的微縮模型過程中，她看待世界的方式也逐漸改變，開始變得更加關(guan) 注細節。我們(men) 能感受到對微縮模型的熱情是如何影響了她的行為(wei) 。Anjali 回想了她從(cong) 製作微縮模型中獲得的快樂(le) ，和過程中培養(yang) 起來的耐心，她的反思讓招生官看到了她在解決(jue) 問題時展現出的戰略性思維，以及她在麵對挑戰時的韌性。我們(men) 強烈感受到她會(hui) 在JHU找到歸屬感，因為(wei) JHU的學生善於(yu) 利用多種視角來解決(jue) 問題。

Korean Sticky Notes

BY NANCY

Admissions Committee Comments

Nancy’s essay details the responsibilities she had at a young age and her resulting spirit of exploration. She shares memories of supporting her mother through the aisles of H Mart, and we learn about the strategic thinking skills she builds. During these trips, Nancy connects with her Korean identity through her mom’s recollections of her childhood in Seoul and later learning to speak and write Korean. She shows us she is curious and eager to uplift those around her. These qualities will help her thrive on our Homewood campus, where the student community is constantly supporting one another, celebrating different perspectives, and creating spaces of belonging.

Nancy在文書(shu) 中詳細描述了她在年幼時就承擔起的家庭責任，和因此激發起的探索精神。她回憶了自己陪母親(qin) 逛韓國超市的經曆，和母親(qin) 逛超市的過程中，Nancy逐漸了解到母親(qin) 在首爾的童年生活，加上後來自己學習(xi) 韓語的經曆，逐步構建起她作為(wei) 韓國人的身份認同。Nancy的經曆讓我們(men) 了解到她從(cong) 中培養(yang) 起的戰略性思維。在這些經曆中她充分展現出了對周邊世界的好奇心，和幫助身邊人的強烈意願。這些品質將幫助她在JHU發光發熱。在這個(ge) 校園裏，學生們(men) 始終互相支持，對不同的視角持開放包容的態度，並致力於(yu) 營造一個(ge) 充滿歸屬感的空間。

Being the Handyman

BY SARAH

Admissions Committee Comments

Sarah chronicles her experience as her household “handyman” and the versatility of skills she acquired over the years. As each dilemma arose, from a torn stuffed animal and damaged fence to a broken hook, Sarah learned how to repair it. By taking us through each skill she developed, Sarah shares personal anecdotes that demonstrate her sense of community, service, and family. We see adaptability as she picks up new mediums and an eagerness to learn through hands-on methods. In each of these projects, Sarah also shows the innovation and resourcefulness that can be present in seemingly ordinary tasks. This innate curiosesity will be invaluable at Hopkins where students seek new perspectives, ideas, and solutions.

Sarah在文書(shu) 中講述了她多年來作為(wei) 家庭“修理工”的經曆和因此掌握的多項技能。每當問題出現，無論是扯壞的毛絨玩具、磨損的圍欄，還是壞掉的掛鉤，Sarah都自己學著修理、應對他們(men) 。通過分享她學習(xi) 每一項技能的過程，Sarah在她的個(ge) 人故事中展現了她的社區意識、服務精神和家庭觀念。我們(men) 看到了她在麵對新鮮事物時的適應能力以及在實踐中學習(xi) 的熱情。每一個(ge) 看似平凡的工作背後都展現出Sarah的創新力和智慧。這種與(yu) 生俱來的好奇心將對她未來在JHU的學習(xi) 起到非常大的作用，因為(wei) 這裏的學生都在尋找新的視角、想法和解決(jue) 方案。

To Stand Out or Fit In

BY CAROLINE

Admissions Committee Comments

Caroline’s essay focuses on their experiences developing and accepting their identity. We see how Caroline navigates the challenge of being themself while also trying to fit in with their peers. After reflecting on authenticity and self-love, Caroline better understands who they are and what matters to them. This leads them to dive into their passions and find various communities with shared values and interests—from coding and broadcasting to quantum physics. These experiences, born out of a deeper understanding of their identity, ensured Caroline could have the most meaningful impact on themself and their high school. As we build a class of students at Hopkins, this essay helps us to visualize how Caroline might engage with those around them to make an impact in our community.

Caroline的文書(shu) 講述了一個(ge) 從(cong) 探索自我到接納自我的故事。我們(men) 能看到Caroline是如何在真實的做自己，和融入同齡人之間尋找平衡的。在經曆了對真實性和愛自己這兩(liang) 個(ge) 問題的自我反思之後，Caroline更好地理解了自己是誰，對她來說什麽(me) 是最重要的。這種反思讓她能夠全身心投入到自己的興(xing) 趣愛好中，找到與(yu) 她有著同樣價(jia) 值觀念和興(xing) 趣的群體(ti) ——編程、廣播和量子物理等等。基於(yu) 對“自我”更深刻的理解，Caroline豐(feng) 富多彩的經曆為(wei) 自己和她的高中都帶來意義(yi) 深遠的影響。在JHU尋覓新生力量的過程中，這篇文書(shu) 讓我們(men) 能夠預想到Caroline將會(hui) 如何與(yu) JHU產(chan) 生連接，在JHU發揮自己的影響力。

A Growing World

BY CALLA

Admissions Committee Comments

Calla highlights her early wonder by dreaming of future expeditions and playing them out in her backyard. As Calla grows, so does her curiosesity and ambition. She joins a team of dynamic peers within Science Olympiad. Through these experiences, Calla celebrates the strengths of those around her and realizes the importance of teamwork. She also demonstrates her multifaceted interests, and we can envision her succeeding in an interdisciplinary and collaborative environment like our Homewood campus. This desire to pursue discovery in a community of diverse thinkers aligns with our university’s mission to create knowledge for the world.

Calla的文書(shu) 裏講述了她在童年時期對未來的暢想（成為(wei) 一名野外動物學家），以及試圖在自家後院讓暢想成真的經曆，這些正是Calla各種奇思妙想的早期體(ti) 現。隨著Calla的成長，她的好奇心和對世界的探索欲也隨之增加。她加入了一個(ge) 由一群活力滿滿的同齡人組成的科學奧林匹克競賽團隊。這些經曆讓Calla不僅(jin) 懂得了欣賞身邊人的長處，也認識到了團隊合作的重要性。此外Calla在文中還向我們(men) 展示了她廣泛的興(xing) 趣愛好，我們(men) 完全能夠想象她在JHU這樣一個(ge) 鼓勵跨學科和合作的環境中會(hui) 取得的成功。Calla渴望在一個(ge) 充滿多元化思維的社群裏繼續探索追尋，這完美契合了JHU為(wei) 世界創造知識的理念。