你好呀，我是來自加拿大的雅思外教Mac。今天，給大家帶來一個(ge) IELTS雅思大作文真題（2021.11.20）的原創範文。
老規矩，以下是正文目錄：
1，題目
2，審題
3，高分範文
4，範文朗讀
5，範文地道詞匯中英對照，包括：
題目改述
觀點類大作文高分句型
展示“詞匯豐(feng) 富度”的詞匯&短語
展示“連貫與(yu) 銜接”的詞匯&句型
題目：
The best way to solve traffic and transportation problems is to encourage people to live in cities rather than the suburbs and countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
審題：
Type: Opinion 觀點類大作文 (我的觀點：not the best way)
Body 1: good but causes societal problems
Body 2: however, creation and connecting of satellite communities is better, as is creating an effective public transportation system
Key word(s): ‘the best way’ — this is what we will argue for or against.
- Model Answer 高分範文 -
▲範文音頻戳這裏▲
These days, it is commonly cited that the best method for solving traffic congestion and transport issues is to persuade citizens to inhabit metropolises instead of suburban and rural areas. In my opinion, though this concept certainly has positive aspects, I do not think it is the best method to solve these transportation-related challenges.
The central tenet behind this concept of centralizing work and living spaces to reduce traffic issues is based on the idea that people will have no use for vehicles, and thus, fewer cars will be seen on the road. This idea though, is likely to cause another problem in place of the one it solves, namely overcrowding, suggesting that by convincing people to locate in one dense metropolitan center, other societal problems will arise. In fact, studies show that overcrowding leads to a multitude of social issues, such as increased domestic violence, and so, while centrally positioning accommodation and place of work together will reduce traffic, the trade-off in problems this would likely produce seem not to warrant such a policy.
This is not to say, however, that the concept of centralization is incorrect. In fact, this concept is one of the most effective means to solve traffic congestion, but instead of centrally locating all jobs and homes in one area, they can be situated in smaller zones. This has occurred in Guangzhou, China, for example, where many of the satellite towns, suburbs and rural areas surrounding the city have become mini-centers of business and industry in their own right. Such specialization, coupled with an effective public transport network, has given rise to residents being able to live close to their work, yet without being overcrowded, while simultaneously, allowing them the convenience of living near the city.
In conclusion, while the concept of centralization is a sound proposal for reducing traffic issues, persuading people to amass in one central area for both work and living will likely cause overcrowding; hence, I believe business specialization of satellite towns and surrounding metropolitan areas, connected by an effective public transport system, is more practical in helping to solve traffic congestion.
- Essay Analysis 範文解析 -
- (1) Introduction
Paraphrasing from the Statement/Question 題目改述:
- way = method
- to solve = for solving
- traffic and transportation problems = traffic congestion and transport issues
- to encourage = to persuade
- people = citizens
- to live in= to inhabit
- cities = metropolises
- rather than = instead of
- the suburbs = suburban areas
- countryside = rural areas
Standard Phrase for the “Opinion” type essay 觀點類大作文高分句型：
- These days,
- it is commonly cited that
- In my opinion,
- though this concept
- I do not think it is the
Words showing Cohesion (C&C) 展示“連貫與(yu) 銜接”的詞匯和短語:
- is to
- instead of
- though this
- certainly
- these
Vocabulary 高分地道詞匯和短語：
- traffic congestion 交通阻塞
- issues 問題
- to persuade 勸服
- citizens 居民
- inhabit 居住
- metropolises 都市
- suburban 郊區的
- -related (e.g. transportation-related challenges) ……相關的
- (2) Body 1 -
Aspects that must be referred to 這段需要提到：
The best way to solve traffic and transportation problems is to encourage people to live in cities
Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高頻句型：
The central tenet behind this concept of….is based on
Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道詞匯和短語：
- the central tenet 中心原理
- centralizing 集中
- vehicles 車輛
- ‘on the road’ 在路上
- in place of 取代
- overcrowding 過度擁擠
- convincing people to 勸說人們
- dense 密集的
- societal problems 社會問題
- multitude of 大量的；很多
- domestic violence 家暴
- positioning 安置
- accommodation 住處；住宿
- the trade-off in 回報
- to warrant 使有必要；(做某事的)正當理由/依據
Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“連貫與(yu) 銜接”的詞匯和短語：
- is based on
- that
- , and thus,
- , fewer
- This idea though,
- another
- , namely
- , suggesting that
- , other
- in fact,
- leads to
- , such as
- , and so, while
- this
- such
- (3) Body 2 -Aspects that must be referred to 這段需要提到：
I do not think it is the best way to solve these transportation-related challenges
Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高頻句型：
This is not to say, however, that the concept of
Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道詞匯和短語：
- zones 區域
- satellite towns 衛星城
- mini-centers 微中心
- in their own right 單獨地
- specialization 專門化
- public transport network 公共交通網
- simultaneously 同時
- the convenience of living near 居住在……的便利性
Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“連貫與(yu) 銜接”的詞匯和短語：
- This is not to say, however, that
- In fact,
- One of the best ways to
- , but instead of
- , they
- This
- , for example, where
- have become
- coupled with
- , has given rise to
- , yet
- , while simultaneously
- , allowing them
- (4) Conclusion -
Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高頻句型：
- In conclusion,
- while the
- , I believe
Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道詞匯和短語：
- a sound proposal 不錯的提議
- amass 聚集；積累
Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“連貫與(yu) 銜接”的詞匯和短語：
- , while
- Hence,
- , connected by
- , is
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