雅思寫作母語教師範文：老人隻給自己花錢的利弊

今天，給大家帶來一個(ge) IELTS雅思大作文真題的原創範文。

題目：

In some countries, old people who retire from work spend money on themselves (e.g. holiday) rather than save money for their children. Is this a positive or negative development?

審題：

Type: Opinion 觀點類大作文 (我的觀點：generally negative)

Body 1: elderly should enjoy themselves however should ensure there is an inheritance

Body 2: children may expect to be supported by parents/still parents have a duty to assist

Key words: rather than / development

- Model Answer 高分範文-

In some nations, the elderly use their retirement savings to enjoy themselves instead of ensuring their children have an inheritance. In my opinion, while senior citizens should pursue methods of enjoyment, the trend of only spending on themselves without passing on their wealth to their offspring is a deleterious trend.

One of the main reasons cited for why retirees should spend on extravagances, such as holiday cruises and vacation homes, is that there is a belief that the aged have ‘served their time’ working, and thus deserve their retirement to be spent in pleasure. While this is undoubtedly reasonable, parents, who are also most likely grandparents, should insist that a sizeable portion of their assets and savings are inherited by their children, and by proxy, their grandchildren. This continuation of wealth accumulation is the primary method used by family units to secure a successful and prosperous progeny, and to ensure that a family’s bloodline continues to flourish.

It can also be argued that by promising the younger generation an inheritance, they will expect not just a financial legacy, but also handouts and may even expect this type of support as adults. Despite this claim, however, this situation is rare, since for most, it is clear one must become financially independent. Nevertheless, in order to make life easier and less of a struggle, parents should still do their best to guarantee wealth is passed down, and in matters of great importance, such as buying a house, they should have the funds available to assist their children. In this way, parents can better enable their offspring to thrive, rather than just survive.

In conclusion, while those in their golden years should have every right to enjoy themselves, they should also ensure that the future generation is financially safeguarded, and so in my opinion, the phenomenon of retirees lavishly spending on their own gratification without consideration for their children’s future lives is a negative development.

- Essay Analysis 範文解析 -

- (1) Introduction

Paraphrasing from the Statement/Question 題目改述:

In some countries = In some nations
old people = the elderly
who retire from work spend money = use their retirement savings
spend money on themselves = use…savings to enjoy themselves
rather than = instead of
save money for their children = children have an inheritance

Standard Phrase for the “Opinion” type essay 觀點類大作文高分句型：

In some nations 在一些國家
In my opinion, while 在我看來，
is a deleterious trend 不好的趨勢 (deleterious相當於harmful)

Words showing Cohesion (C&C) 展示“連貫與(yu) 銜接”的詞匯和短語:

their
to
instead of
, while
, the
only
themselves
without

Vocabulary 高分地道詞匯和短語：

retirement savings 退休儲蓄；退休金
inheritance 繼承
senior citizens 老年人
offspring 後代
deleterious 有害的

- (2) Body 1 -

Aspects that must be referred to 這段需要提到：

Elderly parents should be able to enjoy themselves, but should also ensure an inheritance for their children

Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高頻句型：

One of the main reasons cited for why

Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道詞匯和短語：

cited 被認為是；引用
retirees 退休人員
extravagances 揮霍；奢侈
holiday cruises 度假郵輪
vacation homes 度假屋
the aged 老人
‘served their time’ 工作了一生
insist 堅持
a sizeable portion of 很大一部分
inherited by 由……繼承
and by proxy = through another way = the implication is = is an intermediary for
continuation of 延續
wealth accumulation 積累財富
the primary method 主要方式
family units 家族
secure 保衛；保證；確保
prosperous 繁榮的；興旺的
progeny 子孫；後代
family’s bloodline 家族血脈
to flourish 興旺；昌盛