雅思小作文線圖不寫交點能考到7.5分嗎？

如果你在以前問我，我會(hui) 跟你說：太難了，別這樣寫(xie) 。‍‍‍‍‍看看這個(ge) 題目：C17Test4 The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.在我之前為(wei) 這個(ge) 題寫(xie) 的解析中，提到了3個(ge) 交點：

開店和關(guan) 店數量大小關(guan) 係發生變化的年份（交點）包括2012, 2015, 2016。‍‍‍‍在我常年的雅思寫(xie) 作教學中，線圖有交點，肯定是要寫(xie) 的。比如C7Test2的考官範文節選：

The consumption of chicken, on the other hand, showed an upward trend, overtaking that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989.而且句式很簡單，就是在寫(xie) 趨勢的時候，用現在分詞做狀語加入超過。但是，看到C17Test4的範文，我大跌眼鏡。

官方7.5分考生範文

‍The line graph shows trends in shop closures and openings of new shops in a particular country between the years 2011 and 2018.In 2011 approximately 6,400 shops closed. The number of closures fluctuated over the next four years until 2015, when there was a dramatic fall in closures to roughly 700 shops. The following year the number of shops closing their doors rose sharply, reaching over 5,000. The figures remained steady for the next two years, with just over 5,000 closures in 2018.The number of new shops opening decreased dramatically between 20111 (approximately 8,500) and 2012 (just under 4,000) but rebounded by roughly 50% by 2014. In 2015, the number of openings then fell to the 2012 level, but remained stable for the next two years. The last recorded year, 2018, saw a further fall to 3,000 new openings, the lowest point in this seven year period.Overall, the number of shop closures has remained within the 5,000 to 7,000 range (with the exception of 2015). In contrast, new shop openings have shown a wider range of figures, but generally indicate a downward trend over the same period.

雖然我看得出ta的英語水平很好，擅長寫(xie) 作，但是ta確實沒有寫(xie) 交點。‍‍‍幾乎就是2條線（開店數量和關(guan) 店數量）各寫(xie) 各的，僅(jin) 僅(jin) 在overall段做了簡單的比較。

得到的評語如下：‍‍‍This is a strong response which provides a clear overview in the final paragraph. Data is presented and key features are highlighted appropriately.

一時間讓我對自己的雅思寫(xie) 作教學感到迷茫。因為(wei) 我一直以來對學生的要求是“麵麵俱到”——既要爭(zheng) 取4條評分標準中詞匯和語法的分，也要爭(zheng) 取TA和CC的分。

‍‍‍‍‍‍在實際教學中，1 如果學生寫(xie) 線圖不寫(xie) 交點，我肯定要揪著不放，強製加入；‍‍‍‍2 我也在批改其他老師的學生的作文時，因為(wei) 沒有寫(xie) 交點而嚴(yan) 厲扣分。‍‍‍我的考慮是，詞匯和語法，絕大多數學生分數的上限是7分，然而TA和CC往往都是5分（主要因為(wei) comparisons寫(xie) 不全），這樣得到的最終分數就是6分。

所以，通過要求他們(men) 寫(xie) 全小作文的comparisons提升TA的分，就顯得很重要。直到看到這篇7.5分範文，現在我樂(le) 意告訴學生：如果你英語水平真的很好，擅長小作文寫(xie) 作，其實簡化作文，少寫(xie) comparisons（比如不寫(xie) 交點），同樣可以把小作文考到7.5分。‍‍‍

每一次《劍橋雅思》出了新書(shu) ，都有人說：又來圈錢了。‍‍‍其實，每一本書(shu) 給出的範文（考官或者學生的），都可以給我們(men) 很多啟示。‍

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