劍橋雅思17寫作範文及解析：Test4 代替醫療的利弊

利弊類大作文，健康類話題

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

題目來源：劍17Test4大作文

題目大意

如今，越來越多有健康問題的人正在嚐試替代藥物和治療，而不是去看醫生。你認為(wei) 這是一個(ge) 積極的還是消極的發展？

思路解析

這是一道利弊類大作文，討論的如何治療的問題。利弊類文章需要強調在論證上體(ti) 現合理性，即在具體(ti) 的分析中，明確能體(ti) 現出一邊的論述的確是大於(yu) 另一邊，或是利弊均等，而利弊是否有說服力並不取決(jue) 於(yu) 觀點的數量，而是內(nei) 容是否有說服力。

這道題目最大難點在於(yu) “alternative medicines and treatments”，很多同學可能不明白這“代替療法”是什麽(me) ，這裏做下科普，在西方觀念中，“西方醫學”屬於(yu) “傳(chuan) 統療法”或“正規療法”，而諸如瑜伽、食療、冥想、按摩甚至於(yu) 中醫的草藥、針灸等都是歸為(wei) 代替療法。如果還不理解的同學，不妨看下劍4T1的閱讀Passage2，就是一篇專(zhuan) 門聊“alternative medicine”的文章。

了解這個(ge) 背景後，月半鴨和大家一起來看具體(ti) 的利弊分析。

首先來看好處，有兩(liang) 方麵。一是“代替醫療”可以減輕一些醫院和醫生的負擔。“代替醫療”可能會(hui) 有些效果，比如冥想或瑜伽能讓人釋放壓力、感到身體(ti) 變輕鬆，不少人也聲稱他們(men) 通過“代替醫療”改善了身體(ti) 情況，一些輕症患者選擇了有效的的代替醫療一定程度上減輕了醫生的負擔，讓他們(men) 有更多精力接診更需要的病人。二是相較於(yu) 一些看醫生和西藥昂貴的成本，“代替醫療”相對來說更加便宜，對一些經濟拮據的家庭更有吸引力。

然後來看壞處，同樣有兩(liang) 方麵。

首先最大的問題就是治療效果存疑，雖然有的人聲稱“代替醫療”有價(jia) 值，但從(cong) 正統醫學的研究角度來看並沒有辦法論證其治療效果，有些患者隻是感覺好一些但實際並未得到有效治療，甚至還會(hui) 因此錯過治療時機造成更加嚴(yan) 重的後果。

其次，由於(yu) 沒有足夠的理論體(ti) 係和監管體(ti) 係，個(ge) 人或從(cong) 事“代替醫療”的人可能會(hui) 缺乏專(zhuan) 業(ye) 的知識和技能。在實施的過程中，反而對人體(ti) 造成傷(shang) 害，比如在按摩過程中用力過猛損傷(shang) 骨骼和關(guan) 節，或是在食療中誤食或過度食用某些有毒物質。

提綱

高分範文示例

Alternative medicines and treatments are being adopted by an increasing number of people. While advocates of such medicines may provide a bunch of justifications for their use, I believe that this trend could be dreadful.

Admittedly, some alternative treatments do improve people’s physical and mental health. For example, practising meditation may allow people to have a rest and ultimately lead to a reduction of mental pressure and a sober mind because it requires concentration on breathing and disengagement from the bustle of everyday life. In addition, compared to standard medical care in hospitals, the lower cost of some specific alternative medicines, such as herbs, certainly appeals to crowds, so it is no wonder more people are prone to apply these treatments.

Nevertheless, some alternative medicines that are claimed to be effective might contain few active ingredients, while others might consist of elements that pose a health risk or call for professional guidance. Therefore, these alternative medicines that appear to work could simply function as placebos as there is a lack of valid evidence of their efficacy. To be specific, instead of truly improving their health conditions, it is patients’ consciousness that makes them believe such medicines are helpful and they feel much better. As a result, despite the possible harmlessness of placebos, people trapped in the illusion of recovery may run the risk of missing the best cure time. Moreover, although the majority of alternative medicines are unlikely to cause serious harm to patients, an inappropriate choice of medicine and dose, as well as incorrect operational procedures, can still result in additional health concerns. For example, homeopathy suggests patients take in materials that can cause the same symptoms as those they are suffering from in order to cure themselves, which would frequently bring about severer pain. In addition, treatments such as massage have the potential to inadvertently harm joints and ligaments.

To conclude, although alternative medicine could seem to be helpful in some cases individuals still have great difficulty controlling its risk due to the inadequacy of scientific basis and practitioners’ expertise.

相關(guan) 詞匯和語法結構

unconventional 非傳(chuan) 統的

dreadful 可怕的

a sober mind 清醒的頭腦

active ingredient 有效成分

placebo 安慰劑

dose 劑量

operational procedure 操作

like cures like 以毒攻毒

scientific basis 科學基礎